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Deep inside the cracks of my mind lives a monkey.
He has a maraca he likes to shake
And a blanket made of dust.

On bright days I wonder what he does there,
I even consider asking him;
His answer is but a monkeyish laugh

He shakes his maraca at me, mocking my thoughts,
Grins at me, with a smile that misses five teeth.
Then he jumps in joy, cries out, leaps away

He climbs my logic and chips a few pieces
And with them he decorates his house
which he built in my inspiration.

When night falls he tends to rummage
Through the drawers of my mind,
Poking this and poking that.

He never sits still, always playing his game.
Sometimes though he disappears
Into darker corners unheard of.

But upon his return he has found
So much and all of it he will, undoubtedly,
Fill up the shelves of his house with.

When did he come to be, I wonder.
What is he doing in my mind, pray tell!
For how much longer will this baboon taunt me?

I have a monkey inside me you see,
Maybe he's the reason I never sit still,
The reason I grin my wild grin!

Whoever he is he will stay, I'm sure.
If I would ask him to leave he'd laugh
and with a crayon he found would write:
Nevermore!
This actually started out as a short 4 stanza joke for my brother who always said: "You know sis... I have a monkey in my head."

But when I started writing I couldn't stop.
Now, I'm actually quite satisfied with this (:

I hope you enjoy!!
Comments and Critique to my whimsical doodle are very appreciated!

-Avy
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BloodyMess-VaoT Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
For me that's a very cute and refreshing way to describe insanity and a welcoming deversion to what I usually read and write.=)
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh and thank you so much for the fave!!! :huggle:
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BloodyMess-VaoT Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :iconsquishhugplz:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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BloodyMess-VaoT Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconwhiteflagplz:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
xD You're funny.
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BloodyMess-VaoT Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You too!=)
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you so much :tighthug: I'm glad you liked it!
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LukeFielding Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Wow i like this one! Personifying your conscience and playful nature in a form of a monkey is brilliant!
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Though it stared out as my brothers conscience I think mine bears a monkey as well, haha x)

Oh and thank you so much for the fave!!! :iconsweethugplz:
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mellowghost Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
How cute! This piece stimulated my imagination. It was fun to read this piece at face value and without the intent of deciphering a metaphor.
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you (: I'm glad you enjoyed it! (:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Student Writer
Ahaha, that was amazing! :clap: The last line is just brilliant.
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you lots :iconblushplz: When I wrote it I somehow thought of "The Raven" by Edgar A.Poe so that kind of happened, haha (:
And thank you for the fave ;D :tighthug:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
I do see a few similarities now that you mention it! :D I laughed at first, because it's written in a funny way, but then I saw that there's also a deeper, scarier meaning... :fear:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I didn't mean to scare you ;D But what do you "see"? ^^ I'm really curious ;)
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Writer
Well, it kind of made me think... don't we all have a part of our brain that's 'insane'? Even if it's hidden and never shows? :iconwooooplz:
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I guess we do :iconwoooplz: But isn't that the fun part about us? It can be triggered by small or big things and makes life so much more exiting ;)
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Writer
Haha yes! :highfive:
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
I've always used monkeys in unusal and tormented imagery ... usually in moments of attempting to best those who come at me in arguments laced with clever intellectual and cutting wit. I like your brother for his comedy of self assessment (smiles) and you for taking it where you have (wide.happy.grin).

Mandy
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed, literature, and very often poetry, uses the monkey as a symbol of something bad, maybe an evil sign, a foe, something that torments one. But my brother always compared himself to one, so now when I think of monkeys I always think of something cheerful and funny, witty and smart. As if monkeys had a great secret to them only they know, haha.
So, I'm glad you like this poem, and even more so that you favorite it! It does honestly mean a lot to me! (:

-Avy
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
ah well i do indeed like it

smiles are so important to me
i particularly enjoy the imagery of monkeys with fez hats on their heads
i classify most Customer Support techs as such (grinz)

[link]


from older woman to younger with no suggestions or hmm you know what i mean to say fill in the blanks where ever required

I adore your Name Avy, Avril, April ... hmmm always thought it a beautiful name to pronounce and say aloud

Mandy
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AkashasDreamworld Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
For me monkeys with fez hats always belong to a ...I think they're called organ grinders in english (:
Haha, thank link is so cool (:

Blanks? I don't quite follow...

Thank you (: I'm proud of it,too ;)
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Professional Writer
yes organ grinders

lol
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Professional Writer
ah 'blanks'

i do not want you to think that i am coming on to you in an untoward manner

*shrug*
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