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A deeper darkness yet to come
In nights sweet cloak of sin
Can you hear the beating drum
And see your demons grin
Lords of yonder mountains call
Where mists and secrets lie
Ladies 'scape the whispered fall
Of evils seeking eye
Warm embrace of knightly strike
Breath of greed, envy's spite
Gleaming stars and fires alike
Clash with shards of darkness night
As hell and heaven at morrow dawn
As riddles ever dead and gone
In nights sweet cloak of sin
Can you hear the beating drum
And see your demons grin
Lords of yonder mountains call
Where mists and secrets lie
Ladies 'scape the whispered fall
Of evils seeking eye
Warm embrace of knightly strike
Breath of greed, envy's spite
Gleaming stars and fires alike
Clash with shards of darkness night
As hell and heaven at morrow dawn
As riddles ever dead and gone
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The second one of the Sonnets I had to write for my English Major. I had no idea how to name this so I gave it the name of one of the realms of Norse Mythology Niflheim.
Comments, Critque and Feedback are appreciated
-Avy
Comments, Critque and Feedback are appreciated
-Avy
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I managed to immerse myself in the beginning, its rhythm and promising images nearing conclusion, but I couldn't find myself in the ending. First, it's less coherent, more like a list rather than a description; though it may be just me. Second, the metre gets a bit odd, first with "Breath of greed, envy's spite" technically having six syllables, but a comma adding a pause and a seventh one, and an unusual slowdown at the end. I'll have to think about this one, sort it out in my head.